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Feb. 24th, 2011 10:56 pmPart Four
So, Max, without tearing her clothes, manages to unfold her wings. So, either she wasn’t wearing a shirt this entire time or her wings are some of that magical wings that are often shown in comic books that just magically appear through a shirt.
Once again we’re told that yes, they really did live in a place call the School and that avian DNA was grafted onto them. Okay, I did a bit of research, having remembered the thing of glow in the dark mice. Here. if you want to see. The thing that it says is that the DNA is injected into the mice embryos and then they glowed in the dark. So, grafting the DNA in the … am I getting to caught up in the scientific details here?
Ah. Anyway.
Jeb had been one of the scientists and he kidnapped them all from the School because he felt sorry for them.
And now the Erasers *sniggers* had six-year-old Angel.
I say “six-year-old Angel” because that’s what the text says. We’re told, once again, that she’s six years old. Because we need to know that bit of information again. For some reason. It’s not like knowing it again helps improve the story in anyway, shape or form. Is it supposed to be more horrid that she’s been kidnapped since she’s six? Or is it supposed to … you know, I have no answer to it. It’s not relevant to her character or her situation. The fact that she’s kidnapped should be relevant enough to making us fear for her.
So the five of them fly after the humvee, Iggy, the blind one with them all right. And with their at least thirteen feet wing span they’re flying through trees. And Fang decides to whack the car with a stick he manages to “snatch a dead branch off a tree” which seems to indicate to me that he has to break it off. Which I think would be hard to do while flying. And he gets shot at, but not hit.
at point blank range.
Oh! And there’s a helicopter! How did they miss that? I mean... it’s a helicopter. They’re large and make noise.
Max thinks that the best shot they have at retrieving Angel is when they take her from the car to the chopper. As opposed to taking down the car before it gets to the chopper. But, that would be logical. A grenade is thrown and Nudge and Iggy avoid getting blown up. I am sad. Fang however has gotten hurt. Somehow. All we’re told is that he drops on some Eraserhead and then drops back as he’s bleeding from his arm. But, how he was injured, we don’t know.
We’re then told, as he does so, that Ari is incredibly athletic as he jumps through the helicopter door after tossing Angel through the door. Because him jumping through the door in the helicopter taking off doesn’t show him being athletic.
Max grabs a hold of a landing skid and Ari picks up a rifle to shoot it at Max. As he does so he says, “Let me tell you a secret, old pal, old chap,” Ari yelled at me.”You’ve got it all wrong. We’re the good guys!”
First. Who talks like that? Old chap? That’s something you hear Supposedly British People say in period pieces. This is not a period British piece. The character speaking it is of undetermined age but we’re going to go at most in his teens and he’s on a helicopter with a rifle.
Second. “We’re the good guys”? Why did he even say this? Max hasn’t said anything to him. Pleaded with him to come with her, to let them go. It’s like there’s a missing scene there. Something got cut out. Max should have pleaded with him to come with them, let Angel go, blah blah blah. Something that should have cued him saying that he’s the good guy.
It’s as if there are scenes missing and no one noticed. If LKH’s editor is a goldfish in a bowl, then Patterson’s is a five year old kid with scissors and tape.
Max drops off the helicopter and angsts about her baby flying to her death and things worse than death. But she says to death and then worse than death. Which can’t happen if she’s already dead. It should have been the other way around.
We're told they all have raptor vision (except Iggy, well, we're not told that) and so they can watch the helicopter fly away much longer than normal folks.
There is angst about this. She cries and beats a tree trying to figure out what to do. And she cries. And it’s horrible. And I don’t care.
And Ari’s words ‘we’re the good guys’ are still in her head. Why?
I have no idea.
So, Max, without tearing her clothes, manages to unfold her wings. So, either she wasn’t wearing a shirt this entire time or her wings are some of that magical wings that are often shown in comic books that just magically appear through a shirt.
Once again we’re told that yes, they really did live in a place call the School and that avian DNA was grafted onto them. Okay, I did a bit of research, having remembered the thing of glow in the dark mice. Here. if you want to see. The thing that it says is that the DNA is injected into the mice embryos and then they glowed in the dark. So, grafting the DNA in the … am I getting to caught up in the scientific details here?
Ah. Anyway.
Jeb had been one of the scientists and he kidnapped them all from the School because he felt sorry for them.
And now the Erasers *sniggers* had six-year-old Angel.
I say “six-year-old Angel” because that’s what the text says. We’re told, once again, that she’s six years old. Because we need to know that bit of information again. For some reason. It’s not like knowing it again helps improve the story in anyway, shape or form. Is it supposed to be more horrid that she’s been kidnapped since she’s six? Or is it supposed to … you know, I have no answer to it. It’s not relevant to her character or her situation. The fact that she’s kidnapped should be relevant enough to making us fear for her.
So the five of them fly after the humvee, Iggy, the blind one with them all right. And with their at least thirteen feet wing span they’re flying through trees. And Fang decides to whack the car with a stick he manages to “snatch a dead branch off a tree” which seems to indicate to me that he has to break it off. Which I think would be hard to do while flying. And he gets shot at, but not hit.
at point blank range.
Oh! And there’s a helicopter! How did they miss that? I mean... it’s a helicopter. They’re large and make noise.
Max thinks that the best shot they have at retrieving Angel is when they take her from the car to the chopper. As opposed to taking down the car before it gets to the chopper. But, that would be logical. A grenade is thrown and Nudge and Iggy avoid getting blown up. I am sad. Fang however has gotten hurt. Somehow. All we’re told is that he drops on some Eraserhead and then drops back as he’s bleeding from his arm. But, how he was injured, we don’t know.
We’re then told, as he does so, that Ari is incredibly athletic as he jumps through the helicopter door after tossing Angel through the door. Because him jumping through the door in the helicopter taking off doesn’t show him being athletic.
Max grabs a hold of a landing skid and Ari picks up a rifle to shoot it at Max. As he does so he says, “Let me tell you a secret, old pal, old chap,” Ari yelled at me.”You’ve got it all wrong. We’re the good guys!”
First. Who talks like that? Old chap? That’s something you hear Supposedly British People say in period pieces. This is not a period British piece. The character speaking it is of undetermined age but we’re going to go at most in his teens and he’s on a helicopter with a rifle.
Second. “We’re the good guys”? Why did he even say this? Max hasn’t said anything to him. Pleaded with him to come with her, to let them go. It’s like there’s a missing scene there. Something got cut out. Max should have pleaded with him to come with them, let Angel go, blah blah blah. Something that should have cued him saying that he’s the good guy.
It’s as if there are scenes missing and no one noticed. If LKH’s editor is a goldfish in a bowl, then Patterson’s is a five year old kid with scissors and tape.
Max drops off the helicopter and angsts about her baby flying to her death and things worse than death. But she says to death and then worse than death. Which can’t happen if she’s already dead. It should have been the other way around.
We're told they all have raptor vision (except Iggy, well, we're not told that) and so they can watch the helicopter fly away much longer than normal folks.
There is angst about this. She cries and beats a tree trying to figure out what to do. And she cries. And it’s horrible. And I don’t care.
And Ari’s words ‘we’re the good guys’ are still in her head. Why?
I have no idea.
