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[kippurbird]

More fun with Miss Formulaic. She just uploaded the next part of her story. Here's some choice bits.



Everyone else bustled about, fulfilling the Captain’s orders. It seemed Ruben was the only one not energized by Kent’s dog and pony show.
“Where do you think he went?”
Glick shrugged. “Who knows?”
“Then how is she going to find him?”
The Captain turned his gaze to Ruben. A look of sympathy crossed his face as he spoke. “She’ll know.”
Torres wanted to argue, but knew there was no point. Glick was right. Harbinger could be in the Antarctic, and Nicole would find him. For Ruben, she couldn’t even remember his street number half the time.

She just knows where Profiler will be. Yes. Because they have that speshul connection and it's twu lub, thought they deny it. *gack*

Profiler goes to the DMV to find out who the Serial Killer's next victim is. Why the DMV would let him do this is unanswered. Nor why he didn't just look in one of the databases that the police should have on people. And he does it without a "time wasting warrant". There's this lovely line:

While he didn’t move any closer to her, Kent leaned forward. Just enough to stir the air between them. Just enough to let the pheromones waft from his body to her nostrils.

That's just a weird image. Really, it is. Who thinks in terms of Pheromones? Yes, I got that girl because I was exuding pheromones. Mmhmm. Right.

Profiler is a comic book junkie. Police woman goes to Comic book store and finds out that Profiler has a comic book on special order.

Nicole turned to walk out, but thought better of it. If she had any hope of keeping tabs on Kent, she would need some leverage. She turned back to Sebastian. “Let me have the book.”
Alarmed, the clerk pulled the comic to his chest. “Whoa woman, you may have a badge, but there is a limit.”
Pulling back her jacket, Nicole showed off her gun.
“Okay, okay. Don’t go all Nazi Maus on me.”
“Just hand it over.”


She just THREATENED the guy with a gun to get a stupid comic book! Instead of BUYING IT! She threatened and then stole this comic book. And she's supposed to be the good guy. Uh-huh. Or perhaps this scene is supposed to be humorous. I don't know.

Oh, and apparently Policewoman fits the Serial Killer's profile. I Kinda guessed that.

More later. It's getting to me.

Comments

[gjohnsonkoehn.livejournal.com]

Even then, it's not really a great reference; you could just as easily drop 'Maus' from the sentence and it would make perfect sense. And half my comments to my buddies are pop culture references, so I know what I'm talking about. There're the lines that are clever, and there're the lines you have to spend five minutes explaining afterwards. This is not one of the former.

Better still might be a more generic reference to Punisher and his love of guns, or perhaps comparing her unfavourably with Commissioner Gordon who'd even arrest Batman he was so dedicated to law and order, or accusing her of being as big a fascist as Tony 'Fifty States Initiative' Stark. Or he could take the other route and make a self-deprecating comment about himself; y'know, "Well, looks like I have about as much choice as Jubilee in a room full of Sentinels" or something. Just... argh, just anything but this awful 'Nazi Maus' line!

[kippurbird.livejournal.com]

Yes, but that's requiring her to actually know the genre. The Nazi Maus doesn't make sense. If anything it should be Nazi Cat, because the cats were the Nazi's in Maus. That makes more sense.

:P

[dove-cg.livejournal.com]

Exactly.

[gjohnsonkoehn.livejournal.com]

Good point. Really it should be "Don't go all Maus Nazi on me." Which, again, is exactly like saying "Don't go all Nazi on me." with just one extra word randomly and arbitrarily jammed in there.

[dove-cg.livejournal.com]

Yeah, those are some much better suggestions if she wants a comic-specific reference. Hulk's 'You wouldn't like me when I'm angry' or even something like 'Where's Superman when you need him?' would be better. :P

[jacedraccus.livejournal.com]

It's definitely not great, I didn't mean otherwise. I would never support such bullshit. :)

Yeah, those would be MUCH better.

[dove-cg.livejournal.com]

Oh, I know! And I wasn't being sarcastic. I was agreeing with you. I also don't think my ideas were much better as far as being less cheesy. Though I suppose they're much more ingrained into pop culture, making them easier references. ^_^;